What is your bad or good impression on the end of 2013 and the New Year 2014? Maybe have many things that you are not forget them. I still remember situation well. On the end of 2013 year, it has a bad impression. In contrast, there are many good impressions in the New Year 2014.
The bad impression on the end of 2013 is my new hairs. I was cut hair by hairdresser. I don't like it, because it is too short.I was so sad when I see it. It made my face looks big. Normally, my hair was so long that I hoped to make curly hair for the party. But it wasn't possible. The hairdresser misunderstand about my desire in hair style. My mother told me that "Your new hair is so bad". I wasn't confident all times but tried to concede my new hair. My mother didn't like my hair. On the other hand, my friends like it and tell me that "It looks lovely and appropriate for you". That word made me felt good. And this impressions is a bad on the end of 2013. I can remember it well, and I will cut my hair more a long time.
In the New Year 2014, it is good impressions with another people such as my friends, my family and my teacher. I traveled around Suphanburi city with my family and had lunch at MK restaurant. On the 31st night 2013, I joined the count down party with my friends. We grilled seafood and draw lots gifts together in that night. I felt so happy and enjoy in the New Year. And hope, my life is all happy and bringing all the year.
However, everything will be good or bad depend on by self. If we do good things, the life will be good too. The bad impression keep to remind oneself and begin to do things are good in 2014.
My new hair
You properly write suitable sentence. For example, " But it wasn't possible" You should write " But it was impossible". And "And hope, my life is all happy" You should write "And I hope that, my life is all happy." I confused some your sentences. For content, You create it very well and use grammar well.
ตอบลบAnd "And hope, my life is all happy" You should write "And I hope that my life is all happy."
ตอบลบhi my friend, you should check your verb carefully because some sentences are wriiten by using present tense but some sentences are not
ตอบลบHi, Aew I like your blog, My bad/good impression on the end of 2013 and the New Year 2014 but some sentences are not clear and make me confused such as on the 31st night 2013.
ตอบลบI don't know if you wanted such a critique as I've given, and, if not, I'm sorry! I do not want to discourage you; my advice, then is: simply continue to write the story you're imagining. At some point, if you have aspirations for it. You will naturally have to edit, alter, and correct errors. But, if you prefer not to become mired in those details as you write, just proceed with a rough draft and edit later. Whatever you decide, good luck!
ตอบลบI think that you write good but some sentence are not clearly
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